Saturday, November 6, 2010

Saturday Centus - Danny Part 1

Time for Saturday Centus hosted by the lovely Jenny Matlock at Off On My Tangent. We are back to our regularly scheduled program, after last week's detour into brevity. You know the routine by now, right? Jenny provides a prompt, and we fashion a micro story of 100 words or less exclusive of the prompt. Last week, Jenny shook things up and allowed us only 50 words. 50 words! Guess she got tired of all the complaining - "100 words is not enough, I can't possibly write a story with only 100 words" whine, whine, blah, blah, blah. After last week, this is going to feel like writing an epic!

This story is fiction mixed with some fact, based on a dear friend from high school. I couldn't do it justice in 100 words, so this one's a two parter. And before Tom starts his Southern bashing, I will tell you that I never could stand "The Devil Went Down to Georgia". But now I do at least smile a bit when I hear it, because it reminds me of my friend... The prompt is in bold, blue font.

The morning broke clear and crisp, frost sparkling like fairy diamonds. Oh, the irony. Amazing how something as simple as the weather could change everything.

She closed her eyes, remembering Danny. A gentle giant, his laugh booming through a room like happy thunder. The way he danced whenever he heard "The Devil Went Down to Georgia". Good Lord, that boy could NOT dance, but his sheer joy infected everyone. His bear hugs, lifting her off her feet as he sang "Short People", grinning like a loon. She smiled, wiping tears from her face.

It was the 11th Anniversary of the day she lost her best friend.

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Sue said...

Oh, boy. I could almost feel his benevolent presence.

Good job, Kat.


Tgoette said...

This was wonderful,Kat! Very eloquent word choices and visceral imagery. Excellent job this week!

P.S. Southern bashing, moi? Well I do de-clay-uh!

Bookie said...

Very moving use of the prompt.

The Quintessential Magpie said...

Kat, every week I look forward to seeing what you write, and you never, ever disappoint me. This is beautiful. Can't wait to see Part II. I almost read it first, but then I found Part I! I'm going down the reader. LOL!


Sheila :-)

Anonymous said...

You do such a great job of bringing him to life in this short sketch.


Judie said...

Good take on the prompt. I just lost my best friend on Friday afternoon at 3:30.

laurie @ bargain hunting said...

Oh Kat, I don't know how you say so much with so few words, but you do it beautifully. laurie

Anna said...

Dear Kat,
Thank you for your kind words about my SC-post. 'Jerk' is the right word! Glad the message was clearly understood!

Love your characterization of Danny in your SC-text. Excellent use of the prompt. The natural expectation is that 'Anniversay' means 'Wedding Anniversary', but it can mean the anniversary of any event, even a tragedy.

Best wishes,

For the benefit of other readers:
Anna's SC week 27

Ames said...

Aw, I hope this isn't true. Danny sounds like a sweet guy! Great use of the prompt!~Ames

•••Mumsy••• said...

This is beautiful, and touching my heart. I can hear Danny laughs and dances still..

My Vintage Blankie said...

You describe her memories as being so vivid...even after 11 years. As a writer you make the reader feel that they are part of the story.

Jenny said...

Kat, vivid and moving. I can see and hear Danny in my minds eye.

I'm really, really glad, though, I didn't give you guys 25 words this week. mwahahahahahahaha.

OK, off to read Part two.