Saturday, September 25, 2010

Saturday Centus - Be Careful What You Wish For

Thank goodness it's Saturday. I get to play with my favorite event of the week, Saturday Centus. If you still don't know what Saturday Centus is, you must be living under a rock! Hosted by our lovely leader, Jenny Matlock at Off On My Tangent, Saturday Centus is a weekly event that allows us to hone our writing skills by learning to edit. Jenny provides us with a prompt, and we write a story of 100 words or less exclusive of the prompt. The only rules are no pictures, no profanity and the prompt must be used exactly as written. You can chop the heck out of your story, but that prompt is sacrosanct!

This week's prompt is in honor our Tom's birthday

He never dreamed when he blew out the candles on his cake...

My take on the prompt. This is especially for you Tom :)


Tom walked under the canopy of oaks, cursing and swatting at the clouds of gnats that circled his head. Moving through air that felt like syrup, avoiding clouds of grasshoppers that jumped in his wake, he shook his head in disbelief. How had he ended up in this backwater town?

Had it really been just 2 short weeks since his birthday party back in L.A.? Natasha, leaning close as she brought out the cake. "Don't forget to make a wish..."

He never dreamed when he blew out the candles on his cake that his wish for a writing job would land him in Mississippi. Be careful what you wish for, indeed!




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25 comments:

marty (A Stroll Thru Life) said...

Love it. I always look forward to your little stories. You are so good at painting the scene so I feel like I am there. Love this. Hugs, Marty

Jackie said...

I am not surprised that he got a job lol He is good isn't he? Anyway I hope those gnats and grasshoppers didn't put a damper on his writing skills *)

June Freaking Cleaver said...

Loving the air that felt like syrup - great job!

Jackie said...

Oh i don't mean to be a nitpicker lol but I noticed your link image to saturday centus is not linked to Jennys blog , but maybe you know that already ?

Ames said...

Good one! He probably really lives in Mississippi which would make your story very believable. ~Ames

Cheryl said...

Perfection! Tom in Mississippi? Yeah, you rocked it!

Not on that, this was beautifully written. I could feel the air and hear the grasshoppers jumping.

Marla @ Always Nesting said...

You realize you could be a wealthy woman if you decided to gift us all with a book.....

Jenny said...

Love the syrupy air. Love the fact you sent Tom to Mississippi which is, quite possibly, the most fun word to type in the world!

Thanks for a creative and fun link to SC!

RawknRobynsGoneBlogWild said...

Cute! I love your sense of humor and way with words. Be careful what you wish for, indeed.
Cheers,
xoRobyn

skinner675 said...

Really great post! I love the complete feel of it!!

Viki said...

I bet Tom will be happy that he got a writing job despite the gnats and grasshoppers lol. Good job.

Tgoette said...

You know I love ya' Kat, but did you have to send me to the South? Sheesh! LOL! I know, I know, revenge is sweet! This was hilarious and so very, very well written! I am honored to have inspired it. Thank you for this marvelous gift.

jeff campbell said...

Such a clever idea...great writing ;-) Peace and blessings

mrs. c said...

Great story! Thanks for telling me about the absence of my photos! Also I wanted to tell you....this is an e-magazine that you can view at: lonnymag.com
Thanks again!

xinex said...

Hey! But what's wrong with Mississippi? LOL! Well written, Kat!...Christine

Pat @ Mille Fiori Favoriti said...

Great job, Kat! It sounds like a true story! I'm sure Tom enjoyed it too. Happy birthday to him!

My name is PJ. said...

I can feel the air and hear the buzz of bugs. Excellent!!

Kathysue said...

Kat this little statement has been in my mind for this year. I think we often think we would like something but like your character, it might not be what we thought it would be, I love your writing, You are a very talented writer, you always make the reader want more!! KATHYSUE

Jenners said...

Note to self: stay away from Mississippi. You won't enjoy the bugs there!

Well done.

ReformingGeek said...

Ah, poor Tom is swatting gnats in the syrupy air. YIKES!

You did a great job with the story.

laurie @ bargain hunting said...

You are so good at this! I love reading your little stories, but they always leave me wondering what's going to happen next! laurie

Sue said...

I loved this, Kat. And I bet Tom did, too!

=)

Terra said...

at least he got a writing job right? Very cool. This was fun to have the candles blown out weeks ago...

cj Schlottman said...

This is wonderful writing. I could feel the gnats and the heavy air. It really made me feel icky! Great images and a sense of actually being there makes for a wonderful little story.

Poor Tom.

Thanks for a good one..........cj

Tina said...

what a nice tribute. And toms comment here made me laugh. always love reading the centus' thanks!

Tina from
Mummy Diaries