Time once again to join Jenny Matlock - Off On My Tangent for Saturday Centus. By now, you probably know the drill. Jenny provides us with a writing prompt, and we run with it. Actually we sprint with it, as we can only write a 100 word story (exclusive of the prompt) Jenny, knowing that some of us tend toward - ahem - tardiness, is kind enough to keep the link live all week. So join us! I promise you won't have to wear a tin foil hat to be a Centusian. Although that might be fun. And everyone is welcome, even people from California. I just found out that they actually read things other than People Magazine, Surfer Dude and World Tanning Weekly. (Seriously, I love people from California. One of my dearest friends in the world is California born and raised. That was just my little dig at Tom, who tends to poke fun at all things Southern)Make sure to read all the great stories this week. There are some amazing writers out there!
This weeks prompt is something everyone can relate to. It should be interesting to see what our little band of Centusians does with it!
"This is never going to come out," she thought as she scrubbed at the spot on the worn carpet.
Here's my take on it. Hope you enjoy!
Dust motes performed their intricate ballet in the sun streaming through the old lead glass window. Charlee carefully set the pail of foamy water in the hall. "This is never going to come out," she thought as she scrubbed at the spot on the worn carpet.
Mama's best oriental rug, ruined. What had they tracked in last night? It was Roy's turn to host his men's club and the meeting had run late. She guessed some of the boys may have sampled the fruit of the corn a bit too freely. Tempers were running hot after hearing little Frank's story about Jr. She hoped they had put the fear of God into that good for nothing waste of flesh.
40 comments:
Kat, what an neat piece. It belongs mid chapter in a great novel. Keep writing. I need to hear more about Frank Jr. - or was it just Jr. Anyway - I need more.
I agree with Terra ... what happened next! :o)
I would certainly like to hear more about the "good for nothing waste of flesh" lol. He sounds like he would be a pretty interesting character.
I also agree! Your writing has left me intrigued over what had actually happened last night as well as what will happen next :)
Blood?
I'm interested to know what little franks story is about. It's strange but I can picture what he looks like!
My imagination running wild again I know! ;)
This is a great slice of life story that leaves me wanting to know more.
Good job!
=)
And you are going to leave us hanging???? Girlfriend, more - more!!
Why is that a spot on the carpet brings a man to mind? I did it too. :) Very vivid writing...
I don't know which I like best: dust motes performing ballet or that good for nothing waste of flesh. This was very well done!
You have the beginnings for a great novel!
xoxo
Jane
Some excellent vocab here! Such a shame about the carpet!!
I visualize a southern girl put out with her arrogant brothers. At least that's what I imagine when I read this. You should continue on with this story. Very good!~Ames..
Kat, you are so good at this. You always leave us hanging and wanting to know more. Love it. Hope you have a super weekend. Hugs, Marty
You never cease to maze me with your writing talent, Kat. I feel for that beautiful Oriental rug cause they are one of my obsessions, lol. I would like to invite to come see my old photos of Natchez in the 1880's. Thanks!...Christine
I too am wanting more. Excellent writing.
Thanks for visiting my centus piece too.
xoRobyn
Oooh, I want to know what happens next! :-)
mine is here - http://panopticulated.blogspot.com/2010/09/bolognese-saturday-centus-week-20.html
Wonderful and it seems so easy for you. Don't keep us hanging. More!
You had me at the dust motes!
Great job!
Love the detail you put into your piece.
I think Roy & the boys should be scrubbing that stain out of the rug!!
Amazing how much detail you can pack into just 100 words :-)
Kelly
Good job on the writing prop. I immedately had a visual of some southern "good ol boys"! Yes, I am seaving my photos to an external hard drive, just am going through the ones that are not worth saving. Your photos are excelllent, what camera do you use and have you had classes or training? Sorry I haven't been as deligent on reading posts, the beginning of school is sometimes tough on me. I am now getting back in the swing of things!
LOL! Touché! Loved your story! You always have such depth in your stories and they are always so well done. This is no exception!
You always have an interesting take on these writing prompts. I love reading them! BTW, love that little cannister vacuum and what a hilarious ad - you never know what you'll find on Craigslist.
Enjoy the rest of your Sunday and thanks for visiting with me!
~Bonnie :)
YOu Are A Great Writer! I love this, and want to hear more! Thanks for stopping by and I'll bet they do call their mini Mans, cottages, lol! Silly rich people, ha! Have a great week! Sue
oooo....that's still a mystery!
Love your writing...not sure I understand the story...Peace and blessings
"good for nothing waste of flesh" ..wow... that is very descriptive!
Meow!
Dear Kat,
Nice work! And even your story is about an oriental rug!
Was 'good for nothing waste of flesh' a quote from the Bible?
Thanks for visiting and commenting on my post. You are 'First Commenter' and get an extra link.
Purrs,
Sara Cat
Sara Cat's SC Week #20
Kat, thanks so much for you sweet comments about my new "do". I just felt like it was time for a new me. Maybe being 71 had more of an impact on me than I thought. lol Hugs, Marty
The first line wowed and hooked me and the great writing didn't stop there. You really have a way with words. Great centus!
Well done, Kat!
OMG, Kat, you are such a GIFTED writer...
Great job!
hugs
shakira
Kat, this was incredible.
Often after I read what you write I second guess myself. I hate when I do that because our styles or so different.
But I will tell you honestly that I am in awe of your writing style.
And I love when you link up!
Thank you.
Great take on the theme. Good use of the prompt. Seamlessly!
I used an oriental rug too. It makes it hurt all the more. Yes even greasy food makes terrible stains, not just wine or blood!
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's SC-Week-20
Kat, I want more! I didn't even know about this linky ... now I have to put it on my list of things to follow! I have missed you at Color Outside the Lines ... I hope I haven't lost you forever! Stop by when you can ... let me know what you think of the new layout! :) xo, Artie
Hey Kat! I just saw that you came by the blog and checked it out! :) Thanks so much for letting me know what you think! As you know, we work so hard on them, it's so nice to hear feedback on the blog itself. Especially positive! :) Don't worry - I just wanted to make sure that you knew I was still visiting ... I get so caught up in just clicking on all my faves that I rarely comment, and I am trying to be better about it. :)
Great job Kat and thanks for your nice comment on my blog. I knew you would like that picture!
Hi Kat! I bet those boys were up to no good! I suspect there's more than meets the eye to that men's club! Is this the guy who wound up in the cellar? lol I think you are letting us read little snippets of your novel! Love it! And I love how you have sicced the gnats on the folks from LA in your previous post! lol Have a great week!...hugs...Debbie
Quite a mystery you have going here...left me hang and wanting more. Maybe next week's prompt will give you a seque to continue.
Thanks for a great post.........cj
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