Saturday, June 11, 2011

Saturday Centus - The Wall


Good morning Fellow Centusians! Yes, it's time for Saturday Centus, hosted by the always gracious Jenny Matlock at Off on My Tangent. Sorry I've been MIA for so long, but apparently someone changed my name to Job while I wasn't looking. Let's just say it's been an interesting 6 weeks and leave it at that. I hope you forgive me for abandoning ship for awhile, but life does get in the way sometimes, doesn't it? I thought I had remembered the rules for Saturday Centus, but something has changed. We have 200 words this week! Maybe I should take a break more often. This week's prompt was provided by Miss Nonna Beach at Tasty Tales. Miss Nonna is also responsible for us having an extra hundred words this week, so make sure to visit and give her some love! In case you've forgotten, Jenny or one of her cohorts gives us a prompt. Then we create a very short story of 100 words or less, exclusive of the prompt. No pictures, profanity or other things that you wouldn't want your grandchildren to see. Which probably explains why Anthony Weiner doesn't join us every week. But I digress....

This week's prompt is in bold italics. Hope you enjoy my take on it!

Cindy crept across the attic, floorboards groaning like an old drunk. If mama knew she was up here, she'd tan her hide. Jumped as a shadow flitted across the wall, laughing in relief when she saw it was just her reflection in the wavy glass of an old mirror. Brushing aside cobweb curtains, she knelt in front of the old trunk. Snitching the key from mama had been tricky, but she'd managed. Busy making pies for tomorrow's church supper, mama hadn't even noticed. Dust rose in clouds as Cindy slowly raised the lid. There it was, the packet of letters from great grandpa Cole. Reading the faded ink, she searched desperately for a clue, finally finding it. Slipping out of the house, Cindy ran across the back pasture until she saw the landmark. The wall was built long ago, the stones leaning from frost heave. Running her hands along the bottom row, she found the one she was looking for. Pushing with all her might, Cindy moved the stone, revealing an oilcloth wrapped bundle. Cindy opened the package with trembling hands, staring in amazement. The family legend was true! Just like great grandpa promised. More than enough to pay off the bank and keep the farm.




















21 comments:

Jenny said...

Kat! I didn't even read your story...I just wanted to come right over and tell you hello. Gosh, I hope you're okay! It was so nice to see your name again! Welcome back! Hugs!

Jenny said...

Okay, now I read it! This was wonderful! I loved the visualization in it. With the way things are in the world right now, I think many of us wish we could find a packet of money in the wall!

Your writing is still just as fabulous as ever!

So good to see you again, Miss Kat.

Thanks for sharing your story with us.

Sue said...

I am SO glad to see you, Kat! And I'm glad to read your Centus, too.

Your stories are always compelling, and this one is no different. You've just got the knack.

=)

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This post reminds me of why I've missed your writing. You deliver such a lovely package so seamlessly: character development, suspense, vivid imagery, resolution. It's great to read your writing again, Kat.
Be well.
xoRobyn

Jo said...

oh my goodness ... this was so real! I loved "floorboards groaning like an old drunk" ... wonderful reading!

squawmama said...

Glad you're ok....
Hugs
Donna

Judie said...

Kat, this was an excellent read! I was late posting mine, but it is up now. Tell me what you think.

Sweet Tea said...

Very nicely done.
You have a wonderful way with words. Love all the description!

Nonna Beach said...

Excellent Job Kat !

You were missed and this lovely story was wonderful to read and enjoy. I am going to have to try harder to write some upbeat stories with happy endings. This one was chock full with so much feeling, I had to read it a few times and I smiled every time !

cj Schlottman said...

Kat, So glad to hear from you again! I have missed your contributions on Saturdays.

One thing's for sure, whatever else is gong on, your writing skills have not gone dull. This is a wonderfully visual and sense-evoking (if that is a word.) I could have sneezed from the dust and the cobwebs felt creepy on my skin. The key was heavy in my hand, and I could feel the roughness of the stones. Wonderful work!

Namaste..........cj

PS - Thanks so much for your kind comment on my Centus. It was really great to hear from you!

Bonnie said...

Hi Kat, so we've both been MIA! Welcome back! I see your writing skills are as sharp as ever. I've missed blogging haven't you? My sister who lives in Katy says it's been hot meanwhile it's been chilly here!

Glad to have you back!
Bonnie

Sarah said...

Kat, this is outstanding. You are an amazing writer! I'm so happy to see you writing and posting again. I hope all is well. ~ Sarah

Confessions of a Plate Addict said...

Oooooh, Kat! So glad you are back and I hope all is better now! Love this little bit and want more! And with a name like Cole, I bet I know where the money came from! Uhhhhmm...is there a stash? lol Happy week, my friend!...hugs...Debbie

Pat @ Mille Fiori Favoriti said...

Hi Kat!

I missed you!Hopr all is well! Life has been crazy hectic around here also, and I keep thinking life has to slow down a little soon.

I loved your story, as always!

Rek said...

Glad to see you back...thought you had given up blogging. Wonderful refreshing story with suspense, thrill and dream fulfilment. Enjoyed this.

Tgoette said...

Kat! It's been too long, girlfriend! Welcome back, we missed ya! You may have been gone awhile but you picked up right where you left off with some great writing! I loved your story! I bet there are more than a few of us around that wish there was a treasure trove somewhere yet to be discovered! Be well!

laurie @ bargain hunting said...

Kat, so glad to see your story-telling gift being put back to work. You are so good at setting a scene and making me feel that i can see what's going on. Great story. laurie

xinex said...

So nice to see you are back writing, Kat! Now, I wish I were Cindy, lol. Great surprise and story. You are right about Tina and not only that, both girls are and the other is possibly having twins so 3 grands on the way. We are all so excited but imagine having 2 pregnant guests in the house. All we did was eat, lol....Christine

lvroftiques said...

Hi Kat!
I ditto wanting to read more!! Such a wonderful tease!

Thanks for stopping by at my place. It was great to hear from you!
I hope all your spaces are still intact over at RMS. I hadn't been there in ages but it was still a little sad to see all my comments gone. Vanna

Bonnie said...

Hi Kat, just checking back and wondering how you are doing. Hope it isn't too hot where you're at!

Bonnie

Kelly @ JAX does design said...

I've missed reading your Saturday Centus stories - this is a great one :-) I just love your writing style :-)

Thanks for the book suggestion - I'll add it to my list of "must-reads" :-)