Haunted House? Part two
With the curtain parted, Frankie watched the boys run screaming down the street. Laughed so hard he got a bellyache. Nobody was going to win 5 bucks from him, even if it meant sneaking into this creepy old place to play a prank on his little brothers. What goobers! Greg probably wet his pants when that curtain moved, and Bill took off so fast Frankie swore his sneakers were smoking. Now he just had to slip out without being seen. If the folks knew he'd been in the Sawyer place, they'd tan his hide.
Funny, he didn't remember locking that door behind him...
19 comments:
Oh no you didn't ..... you left us with another cliffhanger!!!! I think we all need a part 3!
Uh, oh! Hi Kat thanks for visiting with us in SD. Will there be a part 3?????
xo Bonnie
Creepy! I wouldn't be that stupid to go inside in the first place!Outta there!~Ames
Okay, now you've gone and made the cliffhanger even worse! You're killin' us here...
;)
your story brings back some spooky moments of my own in the past *shiver* lol
Kat,
Sounds like something my three brothers would have done to me. Well crafted and so visual, as always. Smoking sneakers and wet pants! I'm now waiting for next Saturday!
Namaste..........cj
Hahahaha! I LOVE it! Now it's Frankie's turn to wet his pants!!!!
Oh this was fun, Kat! We NEED a part three! :)
PS: My daughter-in-law is expecting grandson #2, not my daughter ..any day now..any day now...lol!
I think you've set yourself a task:-)
What's going to happen in part three??
Fabulous job Kat !!! I'm thinking about an ongoing episode in my own childhood that was similar to this one...Love continuing stories and a cliffhanger !
YES! I loved this, you just have that knack for finding the perfect line to end each of your assignments from Ms. Jenny. Thank you so much for doing some extra-credit work and adding this second part! Honey, you're just such fun!!!!!
Hugs
Now its his turn to freeze....perfect continuation...hoping to read more, whether it was the wind or the nasty old man himself... :)
HA! HA! Now you have to write another one about something scaring Frankie before he gets out of the house! You do such a great job with this. Heck! My comments are longer than 100 words, and you say so much with those 100 words. laurie
OK, keep going! What happens next?
I love the way you write!
Yikes! Someone had the last laugh!
Oh, Kat! I love this! You really have a way of getting right to the point! I am remembering an old "haunted" house in my hometown that some of the kids would dare each other to visit...but not me! lol Happy weekend!...hugs...Debbie
The selection of words used to relay to the reader the tale from the boys point of view...(goobers and wet his pants) ...
Definitely puts you in his mind set~
And now...he does indeed have a Tom Sawyer event ready to unfold~!!!!
I love you!
I was so excited when this link opened...but darn you girl, you still left us hanging.
I like the 'Tom Sawyer' feel of this. Clever writing... Next, please!
You are GOOD! :-)
XOXOXO,
Sheila
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